Believe it or not, EB liked this one:
|This one, please|
|The Original, please|
and the original one (above) -- complete with Offending Bird! -- better than she liked the one that you, Gentle Readers, found so whimsical and charming.
I think I like the bottom one - not because of the Ugly bird...I don't think he's ugly at all!! Simply because the balance of shapes feels better...I'm not keen on the head only one that does feel a little strange...you could keep the top one and add a few tail feathers in that bottom right hand corner...the one that's leaving with a full belly!! Are the heads and wing spans in proportion? I'm sure you have quite different birds where you are...so I don't know...just check quickly on that though.
I love the flurry of movement..and you can always link shapes with seeds falling - you know what a mess they make!!! and if you have the level in the feeder - I see it hasn't disappeared!!! then I do think you might think about simple seed shapes in there. the more I look...the more I enjoy this piece!!! go for the top one, but add the bird leaving...and consider the seeds...you could just play with real seeds (Don't attach!!) just to see how they would look both in the container and falling...super idea!!! I love the way this whole assignment has lead to such a variety of work.So...I compromised.
I trimmed OB by almost 2" -- removing most of his portly out-of-proportion body but showing more than his head.
I bound the piece in black to give it further definition in space (rather than facing it so that it would 'float').
AND...I put in some birdseed...
|At the Feeder (C) 2015|
|At the Feeder - Detail 1|
|At the Feeder - Detail 2|
(I couldn't figure out how to show a bird leaving...the tail feathers just seemed to me to look like bushes growing out of nowhere!)
I think the birdseed makes it. It likely wouldn't win any prizes, but I can live with it.
What say you?
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