|Rough Block #1 - how it *really* looks!|
|Rough Block #2 - how it might look when finished|
And she -- quick, like a bunny! -- replied:
"I think this is a very strong start...great abstract design with the fence over the fields. If it's not too late, I think I'd be tempted to keep the lines of the fields straight so as to echo the fence lines...especially the top line...Also have a dark line at the top of the hills does pull them forward....you might consider removing that line and straightening the top of the hill both to push it back and give you more depth and also to pull the two sections (fields and fence) together. At this stage, it's important not to think of things as they "really" are, but rather how the design is working.
"Seeing it put together too, I wonder if it wouldn't be better without the two dark lines stretching into the corner on the right hand at the bottom. without those the viewer can walk past the fence and towards the distant horizon.
"At this point it's good to think: what can I leave out? And i think this piece would be stronger without those two lines and also without the wavy dark like at the top. Then there would be a lovely quiet expansive feel to it.."
So...I made some adjustments (by finger pressing, etc. -- nothing permanent) and this is the result:
The "hills" have been flattened and the dark line at the top removed. Also the two cross-bars from the fence (lower right corner).
She's right to a point; there is a quieter, more "expressive feel" about the scene.
Then I thought about an alternative:
The fencing on the lower right corner has broken down. It's not missing (as above) but it still allows the wanderer to "...walk past the fence and towards the distant horizon"...
What do you think? I mean, with all due respect, EB is a Brit living in the U.S. When I talk about the Canadian Prairie she might think "Saskatchewan"...when I'm thinking "rolling hills of Central Alberta".
I can see leaving out the dark line between sky and ground (in the background) but to leave out the "roll" in the hills"? And yet....and yet...EB just might have a point when she writes, "At this stage, it's important not to think of things as they 'really' are, but rather how the design is working."
I look forward to hearing from you!